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I found these few short paragraphs from Barak Obama’s official site. This is his outline of the problems in the US military. According to George Orwell’s Politics and the English Language, there are many instances of “Bad English” in this paragraph.

"A 20th Century Structure for 21st Century Problems: We have inherited a national security structure that was developed and organized in the late 1940s to win the Cold War. It remains a rigid bureaucracy of government agencies, relying upon a restrictive and disconnected set of legal authorities.
New Leadership and Vision is Needed: America simply cannot afford more of the old approach to our national defense. Instead, it needs a Commander-in-Chief with the right combination of judgment, vision, and leadership for the 21st century.
A Military Under Strain: Currently, our soldiers, seamen, airmen and Marines are deployed around the globe, working valiantly to defend our nation. Yet, these heroes are under-resourced and asked to do too much by a policy that has too often taken their sacrifice for granted. Due to their incredible courage and ingenuity, they persevere, but at incredible cost to themselves and their families.
Recruitment and Retention Problems: A country of 300 million strong should not struggle to find enough qualified citizens to serve. Recruiting and retention problems have been swept under the rug by an administration that does not understand the value of service to our nation.
A System Not Serving our Troops as Well as They Serve Us: As the shameful events at Walter Reed Army Medical Center and the recent reports on growing numbers of homeless and unemployed veterans show, we simply are not taking proper care of our wounded warriors and veterans.”

Here are the major categories that Orwell lists and examples from the text:

Dying Metaphors: There weren’t too many dying metaphors “America simply cannot afford” seems to be used by every politician. It plays to the commercial sentimentality of Americans. “Swept under the rug” is also a hackneyed phrase. It seems that something that can be “swept under the rug” is of minor importance.
Operators or Verbal false limbs: There are a few passive voice sentences in this paragraph. Ex: “asked to do too much by a policy” and “problems have been swept under the rug by an administration.” I don’t see a lot of padding in this example, but the writers are obviously trying to sum up the problems of the current administration as succinctly as possible.
Pretentious diction: There were a lot of words that seemed to be a bit “dramatic” to me. These words had connotations that were too strong, in my opinion, for the paragraph. Words like, “restrictive” “disconnected” “valiantly” “heroes” “incredible” (used twice), “ingenuity” “persevere” and “warriors” all see over the top and pretentious.
Meaningless words: There are a lot of meaningless, vague words. For example: “It [America] needs a Commander-in-Chief with the right combination of judgment, vision, and leadership.” This is extremely vague and doesn’t give any particular information. Everyone has judgment – that doesn’t mean it’s good or bad. “Vision” also if vague. Vision of what? This vision is not defined and the reader can not tell if his vision coincides with the writer’s vision. “Leadership,” again, is vague and open to the reader’s interpretation. There is leadership in every presidency and in every government. That doesn’t mean it is good leadership or that the leaders are qualified to lead. Dictators, school teachers, pastors, rectors, and anyone in any type of authority position could say that they have the right combination of “judgment, vision, and leadership.” This phrase is meaningless because it has no specific definition that can be understood by everyone who reads it.
Every single person can take these vague ideas and make them into their vision of what a good president should be. These words are purposefully vague to attract the greatest number of people. Other meaningless, vague words include: “old approach” “qualified citizens,” “recruiting and retention problems,” “under-resourced,” “asked to do too much,” “taken their sacrifice for granted,” “persevere,” “incredible cost,” “shameful events,” “recent reports,” “growing numbers,” and “not taking proper care.”